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"She wrote two tracks for her self-titled debut album with Robert Ellis Orrall and Angelo Petraglia" - I first thought that she wrote only two album tracks (that would be impossible for her, lol). Maybe change it to "She collaborated with Robert Ellis Orrall and Angelo Petraglia on two tracks for her self-titled debut album"?
"Music journalists identified it as a banjo–driven pop song and a sentimental ballad with country and alternative rock influences and a midtempo rhythm" - This is a lot of descriptions at once imo. Prove splitting the midtempo rhythm and banjo-driven things.
"and wrote it after contemplating whether she will achieve success one day" - "and wrote it after contemplating whether she would achieve success in her career"?
"They have retrospectively considered it a weaker track in Swift's discography." - Well, this isn't mentioned in Critical reception nor sourced. The listicles places are low, but "weaker" seems WP:OR.
Do you have any suggestion to paraphrase it or what should I do? That was the only negative thing that I noticed because they're not criticizing the song specifically, they just placed it in lower rankings. I don't want to remove the sentence completely because that may not be neutral... Medxvo (talk) 08:35, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe something like "They have retrospectively placed it in low positions in rankings of Swift's discography"?
Ref 2 verifies that the signed to Sony, and ref 3 does the same with Big Machine. Y
Ref 7 verifies when it was written and the lyrics about "her pursuit of stardom". Y
Ref 14 verifies that it is a mid-tempo banjo-led ballad. I don't think the writer is saying it inspired Lorde, just that they have the "same searching naivety".
Lorde debuted after Swift.... Bradley said that it has the "same searching naivety that made Lorde so striking on first listen ....", I think that's an inspiration but let me know if you have any suggestions to paraphrase it because I can't think of any... Medxvo (talk) 08:35, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Someone can debut after other and have the same *something* and not be inspired by that; it can be a coincidence too. I believe he just drew a similarity here. "Believed that Lorde explored it similarily in the 2013 single "Tennis Court" comes to mind, perhaps it would be out of the scope...
Image properly licensed and with alt-text, and is relevant.
To have a picture of another artist rather than Swift doesn't seem that appropiate to me. How about this not used in any enwiki article? It could also make sense considering the song's theme. Let me know what you think.
I added it but I don't like how there are two images on such a small article... I'm planning on replacing both of them with just a sample from the song since we have good amount of composition details, what do you think? Medxvo (talk) 08:35, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
It could work! And if instead one image is used, I would prefer one of Swift.
I see that some notability issues were raised, but they seem resolved now. Great article, @Medxvo: I will put this On hold until some minor issues (and file recommendation) are fixed or discussed. CatchMe (talk · contribs) 06:55, 8 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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